GED Test Essay: Revising

Last time, I finished a draft of a GED essay, and I know a lot of people want to stop after they wrote their draft for the GED. It’s hard to write, after all, and maybe you just want to be done with it! I know I feel that way sometimes. But going back and reading over your writing, and making changes, can make it so much better. So, I’m going to talk about editing my GED essay.

Here’s the GED practice essay question:

Sometimes, we don’t know in advance how we’ll react to a new situation.

Describe a time when you were faced with a new or difficult situation and explain your reaction. Do you wish you’d acted differently? Why or why not? Use your personal observations, experience, and knowledge to support your essay.

And here’s my GED essay draft:

The unhappiest time in my life was when I didn’t talk to my son for a year. The reason was that I reacted bad to my son getting engaged. His engagement was surprising and shocking to me, and I wish I had reacted differently.

My son came over one day for dinner, and he bought a girl I never met before. He didn’t even tell me he was bringing anyone. Than he told me they were getting married. I was very upset! I thought he was too young. When he saw I wasn’t happy, my son got very angry at me, we had a fight.

Because I couldn’t be happy about their getting married, my son wouldn’t talk to me. He said he would talk to me, if I accepted him getting married. But I got stubborn. I thought he was making a big mistake. Finally, though, his wedding date came up. I was sad that I might miss his wedding, and I called him. It was hard for him to trust me, after how angry and stubborn I was. But we both wanted to get along. I spent some time getting to know the girl he was engaged too and I figured out that I liked her. I was able to go to their wedding, and now, I love my extended family.

Because of my own bad reaction to being surprised, I almost missed my son’s wedding and missed out on having a new daughter-in-law who I love. It teached me that I need to think before I react and not let my feelings get in the way of what’s important. I really wasn’t looking at things from my son’s point of view, because I was so sure I was right. By stopping and listening to my son, I could have made all of our lives happier.

Now’s the hard part… looking at what I wrote critically… so that I can find things that are wrong with it and improve. That’s important for the GED. I’m going to ask some questions, based on how the GED grades essays for the test:

1. Did I answer the question and stay on topic?

2. Is my writing organized?

3. Did I give enough good details?

4. Are there language mistakes, like spelling and grammar?

5. Did I choose the best words to say what I mean?

That’s what a GED reader looks for… so that’s what I’m going to look for. Look through the essay yourself, and try to answer these questions, like you were a GED reader. What do you think? I’ll start going through it one paragraph at a time next week.

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One thought on “GED Test Essay: Revising

  1. The most difficult challening thing I ever had to delt with in my life are face was my Senior year in High School out In Charlotte Nc, was when I had to move away from all my friends my Senior year missing out on prome and

    being around all my friends and missing out on graduation with all the wonderful friends I had met there . To come move here to Antioch Ca, and

    meeting me all new friends and meeting new people all over again it was a

    really hard time for me because I never new anyone and I thought movieng to a new city and State I was going to meet new friends are be really happy but I did end up meeting alot of new friends out here that im still kinda of friends but some not as much . Back in Nc I had alot of friends that I

    met playing sports and clubs and teams that I joine and made through out the years and missing my promiss with my friends was like one of the big is mistakes that my dad have ever made me made in my life but I end it up going to prome here in Antioch Ca, meeting alot of new people and it was it

    so bad after all . I still talk to alot of my friends from back home and miss them very much and I plan on visting them in the futter soon again . It has been very difficult for me over the years becuase I’m alway’s

    moveing to a new city are new sate are place meeting diffrent people all the times becuase of my fathers Job. If I would not have gone to to my prom

    in Anitoch Ca, out in SF I would never met the friends I met now so I’m kinda of glade my father moved us here it has it’s up and downs but I like it here . The only thing I would have done differntly was supported my

    father more when we had to move and acted in a difffrent mannerly way because I really up set and angery with him for awhile for him making us move so many times In my life.

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