Sample GED Essay

Hi everyone! I hope that your GED essays are going well… I’ve got another sample student essay for you, and I think this one is a pretty good example. I think the writer really tied the question to his own experience and did a good job telling the story, and that’s something that’s real important on the GED.

The one thing that I think this needs is a stronger conclusion. What general thing… philosophical idea… big thought… can you tie it to? What does it tell you about the world in general? What did you learn about human nature or the world from this experience? If you had something to add at the end that said… “I learned how dependent people’s safety and feelings are on the world around us, and so I realized that helping make a better environment is really helping people.” Or something like that. That’s just an example. But if there’s something like that at the end, it would really tie the whole thing together.

The essay still has a few grammar problems, but they’re not too big a deal. I mean, there aren’t too many, and they don’t interfere with me understanding the essay, and that’s the most important thing. The organization is there, and the story is there. I’ve marked in ALL CAPS some grammar things to be aware of in the essay below.

See if you can make improve this essay… and try to write one of your own on the same topic!

Topic: How does the climate in your region affect you and the other people who live there?

Dry temperatures and no rain affected people and I around central Florida. As of result no rain, [MISSING SUBJECT…YOU COULD ADD ‘THE WEATHER’ HERE, OR CHANGE THE SENTENCE TO SAY ‘A LACK OF RAIN BROUGHT…’] brought forest fires and dry air. this [NEEDS CAPITAL T IN ‘THIS’] situation occurred during pollen season. Two months ago, in reference to dry temperatures, a forest fires occurred and I got depressed, agitated, and worried. This forest fire occurred only (forty-minutes distant drive) [‘A FORTY-FIVE MINUTE DRIVE’] from where I live.According to the weather forecast the fire was spreading very rapidly because [OF] lack of rain and dry temperatures. [THE] Weather forecast also informed [US] that there would not be any rain for the rest of the week.

During this incident which was during pollen season and dry air brought breathing complications. [YOU CAN DELETE ‘DURING’ AND ‘WHICH’…’THIS INCIDENT WAS DURING POLLEN SEASON…’] We had all these complications from the dry weather
climate.

If I were to go and make an er ran [ERRAND] people were either depressed or angry. A lot of confusion and caos [CHAOS] resulted because no one knew who or what provoked these forest fires.

I feared for myself and neighbors while this was going on. This dry weather lasted for a month, until it finally rain. [RAINED]

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15 thoughts on “Sample GED Essay

  1. Dry temperatures and no rain affected people and I around central Florida. As of result no rain, [MISSING SUBJECT…YOU COULD ADD ‘THE WEATHER’ HERE, OR CHANGE THE SENTENCE TO SAY ‘A LACK OF RAIN BROUGHT…’] brought forest fires and dry air. this [NEEDS CAPITAL T IN ‘THIS’] situation occurred during pollen season. Two months ago, in reference to dry temperatures, a forest fires (TAKE THE “S” OUT OF FIRES) occurred and I got depressed, agitated, and worried. This forest fire occurred only (forty-minutes distant drive) [‘A FORTY-FIVE MINUTE DRIVE’] from where I live.(NEEDS TO DOUBLE SPACE AFTER THE SENTENCE)According to the weather forecast the fire was spreading very rapidly because [OF][THE]lack of rain and dry temperatures. [THE](WEATHER SHOULD HAVE A LOWER CASE W) Weather forecast also informed [US] that there would not be any rain for the rest of the week.

    During this incident which was during pollen season and dry air brought breathing complications. [YOU CAN DELETE ‘DURING’ AND ‘WHICH’…’THIS INCIDENT WAS DURING POLLEN SEASON…’] We had all these complications from the dry weather
    climate.

    If I were to go and make (SHOULD SAY “RUN” OR “COMPLETE”) an er ran [ERRAND] people were either depressed or angry. A lot of confusion and caos [CHAOS] resulted because no one knew who or what provoked these forest fires.

    I feared for myself and neighbors while this was going on. This dry weather lasted for a month, until it finally rain. [RAINED]

  2. Can you hel me by giving me some feed back on my essay?
    And if it was to be marked, what would be my score?
    Thank you
    leorose575@hotmail.com
    What does it take to be a good parent?

    What defines a good parent? Are you a good parent? Do your kids see you as a good parent? When is one ready to become a parent, If anyone is indeed, ever ready, If one is already a parent, hot does one change to be A Good Parent?

    What defines a good parent? That is one of those questions that if you asked a 100 different people, you would get 100 different answers. And you would be surprised on how these answers may differ among age groups, don’t believe me? Ask a kid. Kids have a totally different perception of what a good parent is, than adults do.

    Everyone who had a childhood has thought of becoming a parent or acted as one at least once throughout their childhood. Remember playing house with your sister and/or friends? Starring Barbie, as the lovely mother/wife and Ken as the father; who leaves home to work after breakfast, giving Mom and the baby doll a kiss? Or perhaps you remember telling yourself that once you were grown, you would be the coolest dad ever; letting your kids play as long as they wanted, buying them all the toys they wished for and most importantly: Never force them to finish their vegetables!
    Now, You might not be the coolest parent in the world, but you sure are the most concerned about your child’s future, health and safety. So does every parent (I Hope), but guess what? That is not enough in your child’s point of view.

    Many people believe that, as parents, their role is to: provide food, shelter and the opportunities for a good education to their children, a few realize that kids are not mature enough to understand or appreciate all their parents provide. As I teacher I have heard many kids saying they wish daddy would quit his job and come home to play with them; Now isn’t that ironic, that parents have to scarify spending quality time with their children so that they have a better life?

    Some young couples wishing to have kids ask themselves: are we ready to become a parent? Well if I could answer that question I would say: NO, you’re not and you will never be, unless you can predict your child’s whole life before it is even born. The reason for that is: no matter how much money you have saved, or the amount of baby clothing you have bought, or the number of classes you have taken on parenting, you are never ready for such a demanding life change.
    But don’t panic, unlike many jobs that require lots of experience, you can always learn on the go, and but the time you have your second or third child you will be one step closer to becoming a “Good Parent”
    If you are already a parent, and yet don’t think you can be classified as one of the best there is, You can always learn from your mistakes and make the necessary changes, it can’t be that difficult, in case you don’t know how to change your parenting style, why don’t just stick to Mom and Dad’s pattern? It can’t be that bad, if it worked for you it surely will work for your kids and you can always use your own innovations and leave out what you didn’t really like about the way your parents raised you.

    In the end, no one is really a great parent in everyone’s eyes, your ability to cope with the changes that will happen in your life and the understanding of your children needs as they grow once you become a parent is what makes you a good parent.
    Leandro Soares

  3. My name is Shantell.I am a 20 year old student graduating from the Westchester school for special Chidren,a non public day program for student with academic delays.Next year I will be graduating from school and I preparing to take the GeD test. I was wondering if you could teach me how to to write a perfect Ged eassy please.

  4. Hi, My name is Leka. I have a set date in June to take the GED test. I am studing like crazy, doing a lot of research. Its very challenging for me, to put together a perfect essay. I really need some extra help to prepare a scoring essay. I greatly appreciate your feedback.
    THanks so much!!

  5. I need to take my writting test ( essay ) for the second time, and i still don’t get it.
    please can anyone help me

  6. Im haveing trouble knowing when to stop my paragraphs and also knowing how many parahraphs should be used in an essay? If you could give me any tips it would help out alot

    thanks

  7. Hi Brittany,

    Typically, an essay should have four to five paragraphs. The first paragraph should be an introduction to the whole essay. The middle ones should each be a single idea about your topic, and the last one should be a conclusion. So, for example, if the question were, “What do you think about global warming?” You might have your paragraphs set up like:

    1. Global warming is a serious problem because…
    2. Glaciers are disappearing.
    3. Extreme Weather.
    4. Sea Levels Rising.
    5. In conclusion, these things show that…

    If you’re having trouble knowing when to stop a paragraph, it might be because you don’t have a clear idea about what your paragraph should be about. Make a list like this to describe your paragraph structure, and then maybe even make another list for each paragraph, explaining what you want to talk about in that paragraph. When you’ve said all you can say about that topic, you’re done with the paragraph.

  8. I just registered for my GED exam for this June. Wish me luck!!! And good luck to all of you too!!!!!! :)

  9. I have a question how would you answer a question like “what does successful mean to you? I don’t understand the question. Can you anyone give me an example of three topics.
    Please, thank you!

  10. Rebeca, what does success mean to you? When you think of success, and what it means to be successful, what sort of things come to mind?

  11. Hi guys!! How are you doing on your GED?? I have posted some of my work. Hopefully, these essays will help you guys collect ideas on completing part 2 of the writing test.

    First of all, as a foreign student, I clearly know how hard it is to write a perfect essay. I had hardly searched different sources and kept practicing on writing with expectation to pass this difficult task. But there were no website that load the whole essays, so I was determined whenever I pass the test, I’d share my work to you guys.

    At last, my work benefited me and I successfully passed the test. I hope you guys also achieve your GED. See you in college!! :)

    A perfect day off.
    There are many good ways to spend a day off. People enjoy to do different things. They like to watch TV, go shopping, or visit relatives. Some others like to work in their backyard or wash their pets. As for me, I love to relax and spend time with my family. So a perfect day off consists of sleeping late, going to the park with my children, and staying up to watch a good video.
    To begin with, on a perfect day off, I will sleep late. On most days I have to wake up early. Then I have to rush to get to work by 6:00. When I have a perfect day off, I really love to sleep until 9:00. After i get up and to get ready, I will take a long shower with warm water, and then I have a cup of hot coffee while I read the newspaper.
    Next, my children and I really love going to the park, in the afternoon of my day off, I will ride my children to Lakeview Park. My kids love to play the swings there. We also like to walk a long the beach and watch swimmers and boaters. If the weather is warm, we like to go swimming too. After a few hours, we’d like to get some ice cream and drinks on the refreshment stand.
    Last, in the evening, I will rent a nice video to watch after the kids go to bed. I love old comedies, so I probably rent a Charlie Chaplin video. Of course I will make some popcorn during the video.
    To sum it up, on my perfect day off, I will rest and relax by sleeping late, spending time with my kids, and watching a good video. I am sure that spending time a day off in this way, I will be rested and ready for the next week of working.

    Character learn when I was a child

    This essay was on my official practice test. ( Each student has to pass this test first to be able to sign in a form for an actual test. )
    My life has changed dramatically toward active. Besides, I welcome and adopt new learning. One of the qualities that I had learned since I was a child that changes my life is responsibility. First, because I’m aware that responsibility is important in public places or in any circumstances .
    On the first place, I follow the rules in any environment. For instant, I follow the classroom’s rule to cell phone off and not wearing a hat during class. As a result, my teacher compliment me as a obedient student or in other older student I’m a good guy.
    In the second place, since my brother owns a shop which far away from home, he usually gets back home late. So, he doesn’t have much free time to take care of his children. For this reason, I ask him to let me look after the kids instead of send them to our neighbor’s home that he has to pay money every month.
    Last, politeness is somehow related to responsibility. Once, I received a phone call from my mom’s friend. I politely asked her to leave her name and phone number, and carefully wrote down. Then, when my mom was home, I gave her that lady’s information. According to this responsibility, my mom made profit for she and that lady signed in a business contract
    To sum it up, my responsibility benefits my family and me. First, in class I follow the classroom’s rule just keep quiet to study in the first half studying time while every student working on their own shit, or i follow the dress code to not wearing a hat in classroom. Second, I responsibly take care my brother’s children as I remind them to do homework, or I cook and feed them dinners. Buy doing this I save my brother money which he can use to pay his car insurance. Last, I’m proud that because of my responsibility, I helped mom kept track with her customer. now we live in a bigger and more beautiful house since my mom made a big profit on her business.

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